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the funny thing about
humans is that
we think we are
invincible and immortal
gods.

no—
we're all
roadkill,
living in
a tainted world
where cars drive
too damn fast.

and me,
well,
i just try to
get by without
being hit
more than once.
I gave myself the challenge of only writing stanzas comprised of 15 words each. This was the outcome. I quite like it, though it's a bit cynical. Oh well. 

Titles are hard.

Sometimes harder than writing the actual poem.
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catgirl1917 Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2015
It seems the words that I have kept hidden all this time, somehow made their way towards you... Can you hear the deep sigh?
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LoveIs4Me Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I really like the idea you used to write this poem! I'm always looking for new prompts and inspirations for poetry, and I really like your idea. I shall probably try the 15-word -stanza thing in the future.
As for the poem itself, I really like it. You have very good line length variety, so it's super interesting to read, and that last stanza is really nice. Great job!
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Bohax Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Just a BIT cynical :) but that is what makes it so powerful.
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AthenaLovesHippies Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2014
So true
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Cevelr Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I love the way you title your poems. :heart:

Very interesting restriction you put on yourself!
This was very... thought-provoking... *-*

By the way, I like your new avatar~ c:
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Chamjari Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2014
When I was about five I saw a huge buzzard eat the eye of a deer that had been killed by a car. I don't think I have ever felt invincible.
It's not cynical to except eventual death. My mother, older sister, and I have often talked about the redistribution of wealth depending on who dies when, even laughing about it.
There was some comedian who said at some point in aging his life switched from an action/comedy movie to a Russian novel.  That's pretty cynical, true or not.
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snowkat-34 Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I always love your work and all the feelings that accompany it :heart:
I really love your icon, by the way :3
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CowgirlJessy Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2014  Student General Artist
Very interesting theme. Very thought-provoking. And the 15 words per stanza, although they don't have a common meter, somehow carries your eye and internal [reading] voice all the way through to the end.
Short and sweet--I like it :)
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much!
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CowgirlJessy Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2014  Student General Artist
No problem :D
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
LOVE. And oh my I feel you about writing titles. I struggle so much sometimes. Stay rad sunshine! :)
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
someone needs to make a title generator where you input the poem and it spits out a witty title
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openskyline Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
That is an excellent idea
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
YES! :)
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TinyandHuge Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Student General Artist
Epic
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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TinyandHuge Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Student General Artist
hehe
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apple-bannana Featured By Owner Edited Aug 4, 2014  Student General Artist
This is true, but, some of us are immortal. Some of us want to die...God has no pity for people like me. To walk this broken world is a curse...to die and die again is our alleviation.

Beautiful...You are quite gifted. 
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
uh. okay.
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apple-bannana Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Student General Artist
Sorry...my bad.
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CapedCowboyKat Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
I really enjoyed this, it's pretty true in a certain light.
Nice job. :)
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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CapedCowboyKat Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
Anytime!
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237-IndefiniteTruth Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Student General Artist
This is wonderful.
<3
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:) thanks!
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237-IndefiniteTruth Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Student General Artist
No problem!
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IzzyMarrie Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Well said, and honestly, I love the title.  Good sounding free-verse poems are hard to write, especially for me, and I have to say, this turned out great!  Instant fave, for the impact, the message and how it was conveyed, and also, the well disciplined way you composed each stanza.
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! I'm pleased with the feedback and how it turned out. I may write more poems with certain restrictions.
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IzzyMarrie Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome!  And that's great!  Personally, I have a hard time writing with restrictions at times, but after I write the initial poem, I edit it slightly to make each line reach a certain number of syllables so that it flows better.
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Lucy-Lowe Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Student Digital Artist
Yep very true. I really like this xx 
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: thank you!
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NanaThatha Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Student General Artist
This is very true and beautifully written.
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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Sanluris Featured By Owner Edited Aug 4, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
If it's cynical, then it's rightly so. I've almost been hit a couple times by cars, and when I was walking through the crosswalk, too. And I've been in a five-car accident that was caused by a distracted driver on their cell phone...oh, well, I guess. I suppose it's just up to me to be a responsible driver.

If it's not taken literally, though, this is also a really nice poem for life. :) It's something I could use about now, too.
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
speaking literally though some people can NOT DRIVE and it pisses me off to no degree.
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Sanluris Featured By Owner Edited Aug 4, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Me too.
And there are a lot of bad drivers around where I live, unfortunately.
One would think drivers would want to drive well so they don't get a bunch of insurance claims and injuries and tickets, but I guess not. :shrug: That's the problem with feeling high-and-mighty.
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crystallized-skies Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is wonderful. I actually like the cynicism. Bravo for getting so much into just 15 words per stanza. 
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you <3
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emeFlagrusTheEmperor Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014
Humans think they´re on the top of creation, but we are all just dust grains. Nature could wipe us out if she wanted. Really beautiful poem!
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CAP1984 Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014
Nature isn't a conscious being. "She" doesn't "want" anything.
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
That she could!
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CrescentNubila Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014
Wonderful and true poem! I myself find the belief that we're invincible unrealistic. No matter what we do nature and the universe wins.
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
can't beat mother nature we all gonna die
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CrescentNubila Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014
Ain't that the truth?
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Ditie Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014
awesome.  love this!
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thank you!
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Ditie Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014
:-)  you're most welcome
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Moonstripe2 Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Wow,you really have a way with words.A true poet!
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
ahaha, thank you :blush:
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Moonstripe2 Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I only said it because it's true :3
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