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fabricated gods rest between the
languid crevices of
her fingertips, scribbling profanities
all over her skin.

she's just mismatched bones
& blue bruises, telling of forbidden
love through archaic letters.

a tongue made for
wanderlust, & eyes made
for the stars,
even the devil fears her.
I don't know what it is about this one, but it just popped into my mind and I really like it.

This will most likely be my last upload before I leave for Europe--hope you guys like it.
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:iconlilyhellsing:
LilyHellsing Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2014
"a tongue made for wanderlust"...something about that just...sounds...amazing. I'm trying to make sense of it and imagine it, but I can't. Still, it sounds lovely.
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ThePrettyLightsSound Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
'The cold hands within,
Could never tell.
The stories of hell;
Oh, but she did so well.' :) Smiles of archaic match and mismatch.
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introverted-ghost Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2013   Writer
So beautiful.
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MandatoryYesterdays Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2013
This is possibly my favorite poem ever written. It's absolutely gorgeous. I love the words you use and how they fit so well together. This is beautiful.
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flightlessheron Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013  Student Writer
hello, dear!

i love the line:
even the devil fears her

what an excellent way to
conclude the poem.

your diction is captivating.
the descriptions you create
flow beautifully with the piece
from beginning to end.

i don't know what to say about
this piece except that it is just
magnificent.

well done! :heart:
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:iconlupus-astra:
lupus-astra Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Asdfgh thank you so much! ;_; your honest and in depth comment made me happy. :)
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:iconflightlessheron:
flightlessheron Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2013  Student Writer
i'm glad, dear! :heart:
those are the most exciting
comments to receive. (:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2013   General Artist
THIS IS JUST SO VERY BEAUTIFUL- YOU ARE SO VERY BEAUTIFUL :tighthug: :heart: :heart: :heart:
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:iconlupus-astra:
lupus-astra Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
AHHHH THANK YOU SO MUUUUCH

<3
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2013   General Artist
MOST WELCOME, MOST WONDERFUL <3 <3 <3
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toxic--sunrise Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013
i love this, too. i'm finding all sorts of pretty things today.
though, the final stanza doesn't seem as strongly connected to the other two, but it's still amazing.
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HiddenShadowSpirit Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I can't even write compared to this.
Excellent use of diction.
"Wanderlust."
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Tomea Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013   Writer
i love the imagery you have used, as well as the swift flow you had written with. 'languid crevices of her fingertips, scribbling profanities all over her skin'

fuck. you have such a way with words. I don't even know what my favourite part is.

have an excellent trip dear.
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Itsuko97 Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013  Student Artist
I'm completely in love with your poetry. It's absolutely gorgeous. Please forgive me if I favorite a lot of your work at once, it's stunning. :)
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camelopardalisinblue Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You make beautiful use of imagery and metaphor in this lovely piece, and great use of sound. One thing I would suggest is that you modify that last stanza slightly to clarify that it is her tongue and eyes, rather than that she is the tongue and eyes (does that make sense?)

Either way, a lovely piece, and I hope you've enjoyed/are enjoying Europe! :)
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flightlessheron Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2013  Student Writer
your piece has been featured here --> [link]
and is eligible for the feature game. please
read the journal for more details. :heart:
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YellowBeast Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I really freaking hope you like it! It's gorgeous :love:.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
your writing is far too lovely :heart: I love that you start off with "fabricated" gods, but it's the real devil that fears her.
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kushamisaru Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Pfft I wish my hands were half as skilled as this makes them sound. I can barely write my name legibly. Stupid motor skills... On the more metaphorical scale, though, I feel like I've improved quite a bit :D It's encouraging.

Lovely imagery by you, as always. A nice piece to let us sit on during your trip :nod:
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autumn-spirit Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013
the metaphors here are incredibly unique and mesmerizing.. "fabricated gods." wonderful!
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:iconworldpeaceismine:
worldpeaceismine Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Words shall not describe the wonder I hold for this.
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CrazyCharlette1415 Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:D Very nice~ Deep as always!

Have fun in Europe!
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:iconlupus-astra:
lupus-astra Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks very much. :)
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LayaAmaranthi Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
It's beautiful. :heart:

And have fun! :)
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:iconlupus-astra:
lupus-astra Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :heart:
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:iconwinterelle:
Winterelle Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013
Ahh this is so sensual and gorgeous
Amazing work darling~
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:iconlupus-astra:
lupus-astra Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! :heart:
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StarryFishBoneSoup Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Student General Artist
O.O......Me muy gusta.
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:iconlupus-astra:
lupus-astra Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks. :)
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StarryFishBoneSoup Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Student General Artist
XD
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:iconpiezelle:
Piezelle Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist
You scared me for a moment with this.
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:iconlupus-astra:
lupus-astra Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Pft, why?
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:iconpiezelle:
Piezelle Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist
Arrrrgh I dunno. I was reading the first few sentences and thought something bad happened.
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:iconlupus-astra:
lupus-astra Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
My life isn't always in shambles, lol.
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Piezelle Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist
I know but... ;w;
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TurpentineAndCoffee Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Student Writer
Lovely <33
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :]
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TurpentineAndCoffee Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Student Writer
You're welcome. c:
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findmyface Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Nice this is a really great one! Good luck in Europe have fun!
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:iconlupus-astra:
lupus-astra Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks. :heart:
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findmyface Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Of course! ^^
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Aww, I love it! You mixed in a lot of my prompts. :)
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:iconlupus-astra:
lupus-astra Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Ehe, yeah, I remembered them and thought they would incorporate into this nicely. ^^;
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DearPoetry Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
And they did, quite nicely! :)
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UnluckyNumberXIII Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I like it. I envy you going to Europe. I love it there.
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:iconlupus-astra:
lupus-astra Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks. :) And don't envy me, I'll feel weird.
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UnluckyNumberXIII Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You're welcome.

The only reason I envy you is because I lived there for ages and now I miss it. I would love to go back. Enjoy it. Where in Europe are you going, if you don't mind the asking?
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
France, Switzerland, and Germany!
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UnluckyNumberXIII Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Yeah... Definitely jealous. But I've been there, so I can't complain. You know, if you're driving, you should take the Gotthard pass and not the tunnel. They have fantastic views up there. :)
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tylerp1991 Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
very cool :iconawesomenessplz:
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