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there are 206 bones in the
human body. it only takes one good
squeeze and your neck can snap as
easily as a twig.

once, when i was at the grocery
store, i came across a crate of
peaches. they were on sale because
every single one was bruised and it
made me think, "we're all just pieces of fruit
left to rot. as soon as we've been dropped on the
floor, no one wants to help us back up."

i've forgotten how to think in poetics.

three months ago i would have
compared people to roses. pretty little petals
that can be crushed with just
one little pinch and thorny stems that
whisper "don't touch me."

but now,
i think we're more like
bombshells; jammed
together like suffocating sardines in tiny
wooden boxes decorated with red
paint announcing across the sides
"danger: this side up."
I actually like this one.

Human beings are fragile yet at the same time so utterly stubborn.

I shouldn't be allowed to think to much.
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Partner-in-crime Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
That last Stanza was just- WOW. Great stuff. 
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ghearradh Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2013
wow. this is now one of my favorite poems. the last stanza is so outstandingly wonderful. you have a mighty talent, dear. :heart:
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
ack, thank you so much! :)
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FierySpark Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Jeez. This is so beautiful and it really got me thinking ^^
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:iconlupus-astra:
lupus-astra Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you <3
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chancerox Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
the last two stanzas absolutely took my breath away. you are so talented. 
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:iconlupus-astra:
lupus-astra Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you <3
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MyPoeticReality Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2013   Writer
I'm so in love with this!
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:iconlupus-astra:
lupus-astra Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm glad to hear so :)
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worldpeaceismine Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Think. Go ahead and let your thoughts fly! 



ok maybe not fly. maybe let to play in your mind garden and occasionally let out here. In DA. where i can gaze upon their wonderfulness.
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:iconlupus-astra:
lupus-astra Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Mind garden...I like the sound of that.
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worldpeaceismine Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
i will occasionally sneak into it and observe your beautiful thoughts.




that was creepy...
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seafishandstarfire Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013
this is incredible! fantastic job.
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:iconlupus-astra:
lupus-astra Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you. <3
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BunnyFitzgerald Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013
"we're all just pieces of fruit left to rot. as soon as we've been dropped on the floor, no one wants to help us back up." Damn. This is spot on. Honestly, this describes so many of us humans perfectly.
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MissSensitiveness48 Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2013  Hobbyist
I couldn't agree more with you!
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:iconlupus-astra:
lupus-astra Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Rotten to the core, eh?
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SECRET-NINJA-SUPER-M Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013   General Artist
Amazing~      This one has given me something to think about, you have inspired a musing on the nature of life.
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Go forth and muse, young one.
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KoolShakes Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
wow! really great!
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:iconlupus-astra:
lupus-astra Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thanks <3
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KoolShakes Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
welcome!
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M-Gray-M Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Aaaah, man I really, really love this one. Like, honestly this is probably one of my favorites?? Great work, as always. 
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :heart:
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ohellohara Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
"i've forgotten how to think in poetics."

This gave me chills. The quoted line struck a chord with me... I guess I feel like I relate to it too well. And yet, I continue to write. So utterly stubborn am I.

You just got yourself a new watcher. Thank you so much for sharing.
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:iconlupus-astra:
lupus-astra Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Pretty much how it's going with me right now.

Thank you so much! That means a lot <3
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Tarzok Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013
:clap::clap::clap:
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:iconlupus-astra:
lupus-astra Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:la:
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grew-up-a-screw-up Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013  Student General Artist
This is a really brilliant piece,  the message comes across clear and it's bolshy. It's very good and thought provoking, well done! :glomp:
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. <3 That means a lot coming from you :hug:
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grew-up-a-screw-up Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2013  Student General Artist
You're very welcome! :glomp:
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TheCriticofInnocence Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2013  Student General Artist
...and it's that stubbornness that keeps us from getting screwed by everything else.

A skillfully-written piece. I'd suggest to capitalize the first letter of each stanza to help with the transitions, but that's just my style.

Its main theme grows and changes in the piece, a device which I love to see.

I think you could put it as slam poetry and have it do well.

In essence, I believe it is Transcendentally Perfect.
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I've never done slam poetry. I'm too nervous. Plus I've never really shown my work offscreen...
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TheCriticofInnocence Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013  Student General Artist
I'm not saying you have to. I just thought it might work if it were used in a slam poetry contest as well. A thought, rather than a suggestion.

Huh...Understandable. Trust me, you're not the only one.
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Kai-ni Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2013  Student Digital Artist
It's an amazing piece of writing, it drew me right on in on a website that I usually just don't even bother looking at writing. But can I ask why it's all in lowercase? It makes it look almost... lazy, like something on a mobile phone where no one bothers with the shift key.
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Sometimes I write in all lowercase. It depends on my mood. I thought it would fit for this one. :)
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ssensory Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2013   Writer
The reason why this poem or even scads of poetry drop the caps because it's a style most commonly utilized in contemporary poetry. 
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Kai-ni Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2013  Student Digital Artist
Strange. To me anyway.
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ssensory Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2013   Writer
Ah, it's not strange to me. I don't like classical poetry that much so I'm used to seeing poetry in lowercase most of the time.
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Espada-Kitsuki Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I actually like the idea of being a bombshell.
Hell, I can be pretty dangerous. But fragile too, that's true.

All humans are like that. .w.
You, sir, are a genius.
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:iconlupus-astra:
lupus-astra Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
it means we're fucking hot too, yo.
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Espada-Kitsuki Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:iconfabulousplz: so fuckin' fab right there
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IronArmy Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I like that "we're all just pieces of fruit."

I just want to use that as a response when someone asks me my opinion or they want me to do something :D
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:iconlupus-astra:
lupus-astra Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
We are.

I am an apple.


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:iconironarmy:
IronArmy Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
hey! I'm a fruit too!

ORANGE you glad to hear it? hahaha!....no?...okay
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Piezelle Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2013  Hobbyist
I was about to start a long philosophical comment but I already forgot more than half of it.
But yeah that's true. Everyone's just fragile but they end up putting up 'masked' personalities to hide it. 
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:iconlupus-astra:
lupus-astra Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
...*facepalm* it okay i still lurbe you
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Piezelle Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013  Hobbyist
*le confused* okay.
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Shadilyn Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2013
Your poetry is so beautiful :hug: Thank you for sharing. 
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:iconlupus-astra:
lupus-astra Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Aghu no it's not 

Thank you. :heart:
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