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seventeen years &
still chasing white rabbits,
it's no wonder i've never
been in love.

we're all mad here;
no one can find the road to
yesterday.

(i don't know
where to go)


let's fall down a hole.

(i'm just a chrysalis
with no butterfly wings)


off with my head when it
can only imagine nonsense
& clockwork hearts.

give me a cheshire's smile-
i want to know
what it feels like
to be in wonderland.
Alice in Wonderland will forever be a favorite of mine.

I like how this turned out.

I really would like comments on this one - it's actually very personal, and about something that I keep dwelling on.
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123ooopo Featured By Owner May 30, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I love Alice in Wonderland too~. Mainly because it's just so chaotic... Well to me it is... Ah well.
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Misperception Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Woah. I can relate to this 100%... Love, love, love it. And Alice in Wonderland is just...<3 Especially the Cheshire smile thing. And, well, all of it. Definitely going straight to favorites.
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imperfect-parachute Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2013  Student Writer
You are featured here: ashwazhere-skw-agc.deviantart.… :heart:
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iceteakik Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013
Gosh I do love your poetry. I hope maybe you'll feel the same about mine, though I haven't submitted much yet. I look forward to reading and favoring more of your work.
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imaginative-lioness Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
'give me a cheshire's smile-
i want to know
what it feels like
to be in wonderland.'


Oh my goodness, that ending! It has a lot of power and impact, it is beautifully written all the way through. When I was a child I would watch many Alice in Wonderland movies, and read the book over and over. I really love this poem, it reminded me so much of my childhood and my love for Alice in Wonderland. I really like this, well done. :heart:
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Again, big comment. /crais

Wonderland has always been a part of me. I see myself as a proverbial Alice. And really, I don't think I'll ever grow out of it, even when I'm swiftly leaving childhood.
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LadyFrappe Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013
This was very beautiful. Like, wow. I feel like I really understand this, like... I don't know how to word it hehe ^_^
But I absolutely adore Alice in Wonderland.
And this piece.
Bravo, friend, amazing.
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BlueEire Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013
Holy cow!! That is perfect! I thought I was the only one! you did a great job!
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kushamisaru Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This actually hurts my soul.

That feeling of wanting to disconnect, wanting to be part of something better, want to be part of something you create, a fantasy. Because they're always so much better, aren't they?

It speaks to me. You just don't understand how hard this hits home. Seriously.
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ezradeacon Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is a lovely piece. I like the slightly "off-kilter" feeling it gives, as though Wonderland itself is seeping into your words. :+fav:
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SoonToBeSomething Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013
this is awesome. there's a lot you could do with it :D
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crystallized-skies Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
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Absolutely amazing. Best piece I've ever read. Hands down.
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks. :heart:
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crystallized-skies Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Your welcome.
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Espada-Kitsuki Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
... You should play Alice: Madness Returns. I loved it, and I think you might enjoy it too...

Ah, poetry. It always brings a tear to my eye....

But only if its you who wrote it
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I've seen bits of it, but I don't have any way to play it.

Pft, my stuff sucks, bro. XD
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Espada-Kitsuki Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Nope. Doesn't suck at all.

Not. At. All.
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DenimPanda Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013
First things first,I must say I love Alice in Wonderland,it's one of the most important parts of my childhood.
Secondly,I don't think there's anything wrong in having never been in love,it means it's not time yet,there's not much to do about it,and I think that mantaining a fervid imagination is important,it's a sign of intelligence,just like being curious.
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah...hopefully the time will come, though. I'm glad you enjoyed this!
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DenimPanda Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013
Oh don't worry,I totally understand you,I'm sixteen years old and I have never even liked someone lol. I'm relieved to see that I'm not the only one out here.
Patience and high spirits! That's what we need :3
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M-Gray-M Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I myself love Alice in Wonderland, and what you did here is absolutely amazing. Its style in itself is beautifully written and when it comes to meaning, its clear, yet complex. I really think you did an amazing job with this.
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much. :3 I'm glad you liked it!
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worldpeaceismine Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow.
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Ehe.
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worldpeaceismine Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I used to be really scared of Alice in Wonderland. I don't really know why, but reading the book again, when I was older, I got a different message from it... and I loved it.

I saw this and even though it was a twist, with your experiences inside of it (I will not pry unless allowed to), it was beautiful. Wonderful.
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0-EmoLeopard-0 Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Holy phlegmbuckets tHIS IS AMAZING
/grovels at feet/
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
AWAY WITH THEE, PEASANT.

jk I love you man.
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0-EmoLeopard-0 Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
No but like seriously I could never ever do anything like this i'm just in awe of you
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AnonymousLovely Featured By Owner May 31, 2013
Alice in Wonderland is a classic that will forever be in my heart. This poem was nicely written. It's nice seeing you update more frequently. The joy I feel when I see an update from you is incredible. Writing is a creative outlet to show how you feel and you did a wonderful job at that. I can't wait to see what else is in store.
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It's summer and I'm trying to upload stuff before I go on my trip and hopefully get a job. ^^; But thanks so much! I really love everything Alice and I'm happy this piece turned out well.
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findmyface Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
"Yer late for tea!"

I love Alice every shape and form, I'm going to play the game and watch the movie now, man you inspire me to do stuff!
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
"Spoooon..."

Thank you. c:
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findmyface Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh man I die every time I hear that line!

You're welcome!
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
"no one can find the road to
yesterday."

i love that :heart: you're so talented :love: i love the mix of allusion and personal anxiety, it's beautifully composed.
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much asdfgh :heart: I really love how this one turned out!
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RunLikeHell04 Featured By Owner May 31, 2013
This is good :)

It also helps that I have an obsession over Alice in Wonderland
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!

I kind of do too.
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YumeHoshiChan Featured By Owner May 31, 2013
I'd definitely have to agree--Alice in Wonderland is freaking amazing.

This seems to be using Wonderland as an analogy for clinging to childhood...is that what you were going for, or am I overanalyzing a bit? :XD:
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
IT IS.

In a way, yes...but it's talking about my life at the moment if that makes sense.
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RP-96Neko Featured By Owner May 31, 2013
This is cool.
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks. c:
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RP-96Neko Featured By Owner May 31, 2013
No problem.
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funkylime123 Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Student General Artist
That was beautiful! I also love the format, it really added to the feel of the poem.
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much; I really love how this one turned out.
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Sometimesyousuck123 Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Student General Artist
XD I love Alice in wonderland.
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
WHO DOESN'T?

Scratch that, I have a friend who's terrified of it. :|
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Sometimesyousuck123 Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Student General Artist
Well it depends on how you see it! XD
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fika-with-alice Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Student Photographer
I love this!
Do you mind telling me why you keep dwelling on it?
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :)

Meh...I think it's because I'll always find fictional characters more attractive than real people; hence my heart and mind kind of being in a Wonderland of their own. Lately it's just been really bugging me.
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fika-with-alice Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Student Photographer
Now when I say that I love alice in wonderland, I mean I have a bunch of stuff in my room related to alice in wonderland, I analysed both the novels and the allegory Carrol hides in the books and I have countless facts about Lewis Carrol. (Not his actual real name, is always a fun fact!)

I've loved Alice and her little mishaps since I was 6. I'm 14 now and I'm still...obsessed with it. :L That's why when I saw the tittle of this cute little poem, I had to read it.
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