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Your skin is of paper mache and
stardust, so fragile and coruscating
as I reach out desperately to grasp that
supernova you call a heart;
please, don't etiolate in their sunrise
and leave me marooned in life's black abyss...
I can't survive without your—
Feel free to interpret this in anyway possible, because all I did was suddenly form this in my head and write it down. It's way different than my normal "style," and I have no idea where it came from. It just popped in my brain, said hello, and I decided to catch it before it dissolved.

Can this even be considered a poem?
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LupiniunStar Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2013
This is so beautiful, and so ripe for interpretation.

A great thing about many poems is that they can be interpreted how a reader wants to interpret them. You've gotten that down with this.

And even if you don't know what it means, maybe you subconsciously do? Sorry, that's corny, isn't it?
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ponygurl433 Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
beautiful. And yes. Any groups of word is a poem if you want it to be. That is the point. And that poetry competition you told us about in your most recent journal? This poem. This poem is lovely. The end is open for interpretation. For whatever you want it to be. So it is perfect for any audience. This poem is the poem that people LEARN to discuss literature by analyzing it. It is unique. It is gorgeous. It glows like its name. It should be shared with so many others.
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks. The ending cuts off like that because the title is actually the last word.

I'm thinking of entering this into the submission thing.
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ponygurl433 Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
The title is the last word? I've never heard of that before. Nice and original! I would refrain from telling that if you submit it to something. What really makes this poem special is that the reader can decide what they can't live without. Just a suggestion.

And yes. Enter it. Out of all your poems (I've read them all). This one is special.
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imagination-junkie Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2013
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Pretty. Imagery, imagery, imagery. You've mastered it.
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Really? I think this is weird. ._. I STILL DON'T KNOW WHAT IT MEANS...

But thanks!
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vienna-kangaroo Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful work, and very in depth.

I must be off to interpret.
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
When you've got an idea, tell me. :|
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vienna-kangaroo Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I will.
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CrazyCharlette1415 Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Whoa. Just - Whoa.
This has so many different layers of meanings that I can't count them. Well done on this little poem!!
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It's like an onion.
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CrazyCharlette1415 Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
True, true...minus the tears.
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0-EmoLeopard-0 Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is gorgeous. I know what you mean by just writing it down as it pops into your head, that happens with me too XD
I love the imagery present in this and the ideas and concepts that it puts into your head. Stunning!
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
My head in an enigma. ._.
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0-EmoLeopard-0 Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Pffft. It's an awesome head.
Don't worry about stuff that pops into your head. I remember I once tried to think up a way of re-designing my bedroom in four spatial dimensions. Never again.
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PerfectPunkAlchemist Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2013  Student Writer
I'm not exactly sure about the meaning behind this poem. It can be read on so many levels! iSuperb job, mi fenomenal amiga!
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Haha, yeah, I guess there are a lot of levels.
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PerfectPunkAlchemist Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2013  Student Writer
Those are the stories that are the best. Like Animal Farm by George Orwell!
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epicbleachfan998 Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
Poems don't necessarily need to rhyme, so I'd still call it a poem.

Hm.. I see this... Like how someone may be if they lost a loved one....
It's very well written in my opinion~
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Most of mine aren't meant to rhyme, but the last few have been in a rhyming mood.

Thanks! That's one way to look at it.
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epicbleachfan998 Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
Ah I see~! I can't seem to write anything that rhymes. Well, at least not intentionally. Poetry amazes me...

You're welcome~
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