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maybe not.

because i will never be the fire-hearted girl with remedial stardust lips,
dancing with the astral wolves that hunt beneath her moon-kissed skin,
with the courage to plant wilting lilacs into every crippled soul she finds.

but what if they were?

then i would be the ink blots coating the archives of humankind,
the fractured jewel tucked away in a catastrophic dragon's chest,
and the lyric every mismatched bone engraves into their marrow.

if only.
Prompt #30 of *DearPoetry's NaPoWriMo prompt list [link].

Obviously I'm not partaking in NaPoWriMo, but I saw this prompt and thought, "Well. This could be therapeutic."

And so while I'm trying not to dwell on the constant bullshit that I feel I've been doused in, I jotted this pathetic crap down in some semblance to make me feel better.

Have fun deciphering this. Though I think it's pretty damn obvious.
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SteampunkTigerlily Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
HEY!!! Your writing is beautiful and very good. You shouldn't have such a low opinion of yourself and your work because you have a real gift. This particular poem just proves it, and is in no way pathetic crap. (I'm trying to be encouraging here, I hope I don't come across as mean). Don't knock your work, it is brilliant.
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Sparks-Fly-Upward Featured By Owner May 12, 2013  Student Writer
I wouldn't say this is pathetic by any means. I saw it as an analyzation of that stone wall within us all that says "your writing isn't good enough. Who would ever want to read this even one year from now? What sort of things are you a saying that no one else has ever said before?" Even more than that, that same voice says "What sort of person can be pleased with your words and short-winded actions? Are you just using this fantasy to escape reality?" It's inside of any writer, as we are always filled with self doubt.

That's my 5 pence anyway. Pardon that it sounds like I wrote it while standing over an unmarked grave.
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suzannebookworm Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013
gahh this is beautiful!
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indigoXD9 Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
love this, it is not crap and if it is then its diamond encrusted golden crap XD
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you.
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CrumbledWings Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013
hmmm nice descriptions, really made it sound beautiful.
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you.
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LizKartland Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
How would you think this sucks? Just... I love it! If your poetry was a person, I'd make love to that person until that person dies. That's how much I love your work.
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Aw...thanks.
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LizKartland Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome.
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Shadilyn Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013
Your word choices are always so beautiful! :heart:
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much.
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madameshadowenn Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Definitely not crap hun :) Beautiful imagery because of your gorgeous word choices, this is a wonderful piece of work!(the tone of sarcasm is also very effective.)
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Imagery + sarcasm = normally a somewhat entertaining piece.

Thanks.
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Fall-Like-Angels Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is not pathetic. I love it. You are one of the people I wish I could ever compare to, writing wise.
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much.
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WotanTyger Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I wouldn't call this pathetic at all. I actually think it's quite a brilliant piece of bitingly-sarcastic satire, and every excessively flowery poetaster (including myself from time to time), should take it as a desperately-needed dousing with a bucket of ice water over the head. :P
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! I'm glad people are seeing through this.
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findmyface Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Great really great! As always.
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much.
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findmyface Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're very welcome.
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Rainatmosphere Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful as always.
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're just saying that because you're my friend.
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Rainatmosphere Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm not flattering you.

I'm saying that because I honestly think that your writing is marvelous.
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Valkaneer Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2013  Professional Writer
re·me·di·al
/riˈmēdēəl/
Adjective

1. Giving or intended as a remedy or cure.
2. Provided or intended for students who are experiencing learning difficulties.

Not sure of the use here, but groovy attempt, babe!

;)
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks. It's used because the "stardust lips" pretty much say nothing but healing, protective things.

Which is not what I do anymore.
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Valkaneer Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2013  Professional Writer
Bitchin, I kinda felt that, but wasn't sure!

It fits well in that instance, lil' miss!

:hug:
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forxa Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2013
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm gonna need a whole planet of fluffy bunny hugs to make me feel better.
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forxa Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2013
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