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There is too much smoke
residing in those noxious lungs of yours;
you've inhaled one too many
cigarettes.

How do tar-coated fangs taste
when all you do is howl at
waning, unstable moons?

Just like the she wolf
you wish you were;
but your cub,
she just wants to sing
to ink-wrought stars.
Mother knows best,
take it from your mumsy,
on your own, you won't survive...


Written on a day where obviously, I wasn't getting along with my mother. I'm trying to upload things before I leave on my trip, so have an oldie. But I like this one. It came out surprisingly well.

The lyrics are from a Tangled song called 'Mother Knows Best.'
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kiku----honda Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
There is so much imagery in this poem, my mind feels like it is on a carnival ride! *favorites*
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kushamisaru Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I had to go over this again and again to make sure I fully understood the implications here (and I'm still not sure I do).

This is like one of those pieces teachers would have you read in English class and analyze and everyone could come up with different things. Well, I mean, some things are obvious, but you could kind take others apart and it'd make for an interesting conversation :3

... I feel like I'm not making sense.
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shawnthewolf12 Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013
lol nice one. reminds me of that song on repunzel mother..knows best
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
That's where I took the title from.
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shawnthewolf12 Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013
lol ohhhh im like dang this looks familier...she might of...naaaah...
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worldpeaceismine Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Damn. Nice variation. :)
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks. :)
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Espada-Kitsuki Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I like it, as usual, you don't fail to disappoint.

You only amaze me more and more. :O

God. Rapunzel's mum. She's crazy.
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
She's a loony.
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findmyface Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
"Plus I believe getting kind of chubby." Well is you let the girl out maybe that wouldn't happen.

This is really great! I hope you and your mother get along again, good luck!
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
RAPUNZEL IS A FRIGGIN TWIG, THOSE LYRICS DON'T MAKE SENSE.

Eh. It's off and on. Thanks though.
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findmyface Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! She barely get's any sun and yet her hair is better than mine, like wtf!?

Well I still hope it get's better, you're welcome.
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