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I broke every bone in my body
so I could have a reason to drown
in the isolated ocean inside me.

And then,
when my dilapidated lungs finally caved in,
I swam ashore and crawled across the polluted sand.

Only glass-edged skin
and salt-licked eyelashes
can help me now.
Another prompt from *DearPoetry's NaPoWriMo list [link]. This time it's number eighteen. And now I'm really beginning to think I should have participated in NaPoWriMo because I've been having the need to let off some steam and this is a good way for me to do it.

Anyway. This one is short and sweet. Actually, more like briny. Haha, pun.

If only inspiration for poems/stories would come to me when I needed them and not when I was feeling sorry for myself.

Edit: Holy shit. Front page.
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rociobelindamendez Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2013
Beautiful! well written. x
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ForgottenFears Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013
I love it! The imagery and your word choice are beautiful.
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm glad you think so.
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summerday27 Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is beautiful. I'm at a loss for words :faint: :heart:
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much.
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summerday27 Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You're welcome :aww:
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Ag-Wolf Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013
Just a reminder: you're a genius.
I love reading your work. :3
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks.
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rhgraphicsolutions Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Professional Interface Designer
love the first two stanzas; I would drop the last but that is just me :)
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:iconlupus-astra:
lupus-astra Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks. The last two are the most personal though, so I want to keep them.
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rhgraphicsolutions Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Professional Interface Designer
I totally get that :)
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findmyface Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is great! I was just watching Pirates of the Caribbean and I fell all salt water-ey now. Anyway great poem, I love these.
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. Ocean imagery is fun.
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findmyface Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It is!
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forxa Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013
Okay I feel more worried about you every time you post a new poem ;w;
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Please don't. I'm not worth worrying about.
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forxa Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013
There's a lot of us who worry about you.
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Emily-A Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013
I couldn't agree more with :iconncgirl: Awesome work:love:
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much.
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Emily-A Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013
You're welcome :D
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ncgirl Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Wow this is intense, I love it! The imagery is so precise and sharp - well done!
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much.
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