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Build me a sandcastle on the edge of the sea,
where the cliffs are sprayed with the salty tears of the tide,
and sirens cry into the night for the arms of a lover
to whisk them away into a dry night free of brine;
Where we shall dance the sunset's furtive sigh of redemption
on the edge of saline bluffs, and kiss with the gunpowder
of forgotten cannons high on the waves of an abandoned ocean;
Teetering the edge of the world, where the Kraken and Leviathan lay in wait
for lost-lorn victims of broken hearts and brackish undertows
coursing through their veins.

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Just a random thing that popped into my head that I knew if I didn't write down immediately, it would be gone.

It's funny, because normally when my mind comes up with these spur-of-the-moment poems, I have no idea what they mean.

This time, I know exactly what I'm talking about. I'm not telling anyone else that, however.

Do you think I play around with format too much? I'm sorry. It really is interesting to see what I can come up with.
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Si1VeR-ReBoRn Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2013   Writer
I love this poem's imagery and structure gr8 job!
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CrazyCharlette1415 Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Whoa. That poem.

Is so beautifully layered I would cry each time I unwrapped it.
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
But it's not meant to be sad, really.
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Espada-Kitsuki Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Interpretation. God. So much interpretation to do now.

Love it! And the formats are great. I don't know how to do it, but, eh, I like how you use them!
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Have fun.

Thank you.
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vienna-kangaroo Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is purely amazing. My mind has once more been inundated with interpretations. D':

whoa there I don't want to drown I have fanfics to write
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Inundación means flood in Spanish. Just a little fun fact.

You're not the one who's meant to drown D:
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vienna-kangaroo Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Ohoho. That's interesting.

Then who is? D:
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forxa Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013
The last three words scared me a bit.
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Poetry is meant to be unpredictable.
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forxa Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013
Yes, I see... good job!
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MichaelGarcia7 Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013  Professional Writer
Fantastic!!!!!!!!!!!!
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much.
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MichaelGarcia7 Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013  Professional Writer
You're very welcome!
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imagination-junkie Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013
I really like the imagery in this one. The format is a bit...funky though.
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm trying to experiment with formatting on my poems, so most of them just magically happen and I go with it.
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Misery007 Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Woah.
This is
Amazing!!
I love your writing ^~^
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much.
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ponygurl433 Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Don't worry about the format. Poems are all about expression. And good job besides.
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks.
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2ndCandle Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I love it! Its fluent and the words seem sharp but they glide together perfectly. Great job :)

Its kind of like a ghost story i wrote... (its on my page) with the undertow and all.
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much. I didn't really pay attention to how the words flowed, I just...wrote. ^^;
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epicbleachfan998 Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
Whoa. o.o I like what you did with the format. Very fancy stuff. You don't play around with it too much. Not at all~

Random poems be random. And I like this one.
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! Format is fun to play with.
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epicbleachfan998 Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
You're welcome! Indeed it is! :la:
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shadowblade275 Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
. . .
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Are those good dots?
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shadowblade275 Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
yes :D i really like this poem
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