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Pomegranate seeds
have the most
bitter of tastes.

She is more
than a myth,
you know;
unsullied
and untainted,
a spring's
breeze with
the most
arabesque
of lips.

There are more
flames beneath her
skin than in all of
Hades. With every
breath she takes,
winter cries out
for redemption.

She is magenta.

A maiden of
jasper and agate;
lily eyelashes and
locks of supple ivy.

His goddess:
eternal,
unwavering—
a hyacinth among
weeds and sweet
harvest among
the wretched.

A product of writer's block.

I think those who've been watching me since the beginning know I have the biggest girl crush on Persephone (hence my username) and that she is my patron goddess. I adore her. I adore Hades. They are my mythological OTP. ignore that

So...yeah. Persephone is perfect.

The one other poem I made for her long ago kind of sucked and I felt like she needed a new dedication. <3

edited it a bit because lowercase looked dumb
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I have no words. This seriously was gorgeous and breathtaking and took my breath away. Wonderful, wonderful job. I couldn't find any mistakes as far as grammatical or spelling issues. Just phenomenal. I love how this is about Persephone, I love all Greek mythology so anything about it fascinates me. Wonderful job on capturing her in this piece, seriously. I know I'm ranting a bit but this deserves it, this piece is too beautiful. Amazing, you should do more work in honor of the Greeks, you are perfect for it just because of this piece. You've drawn me in, now I want to go check out more of your work! Nice job :)
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Throughout the whole poem, I noticed your use of adjectives that describe the colour purple, and I love purple, it's a good colour. And all the references to Persephone.

"Pomegranate seeds have the most bitter of tastes." - Referring to how, in Greek Mythology, the human Persephone ate a pomegranate and fell into Hell.

"There are more flames beneath her skin than in all of Hades."- Referring to the literal nightmare she can't escape.

"His goddess: eternal, unwavering- a hyacinth among weeds and sweet
harvest among the wretched." That might be referencing how Persephone is human and Hades is not.


Your work is just so fantastic and breath-taking. So many words can describe it, no words are able to. I truly expect so many great things from you. You're going to go far, very, VERY far in life :)
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LilyHellsing Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2014
God...yes. Just...dear god, YES.
I've always loved Persephone as well -- in fact, my real name is Steffanie :P After her, haha. Her and then Hades...
This poem was just....I can imagine a beautiful scene and person, just...YES. Lol, I can't even begin to express my thoughts on this. Just, amazing. Thank you for sharing it!
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SharpPointyThings Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2014  Student General Artist
I have a patron from most pantheons and most are war gods. The Morrigan, Athena and Tyr 
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WolfxButterfly Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2014  Student Writer
God I love Persephone so much (Hades too, but mostly her.) This is perfect! :heart:
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lifeuncommon Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2013
 I always feel kind of sorry for Demeter though. :(

As soon as I saw the title and the mention of pomegranate in the thumbnail I knew immediately whom would star in the poem. ^^  As another lover of Greek mythology, and drawer-upon of its imagery in poetry now and hereafter, I :salute: .

By the by, Antisally sells a perfume she created inspired by the story called Can't Wait Demeter on her website Goth Rosary dot com.  It's been years since I smelled it, and I preferred Samhain, but I remember 'Demeter being nice too. :)
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littleblueraccoon Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2013  Student Writer
Breathtaking.
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
<3
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UntamedUnwanted Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Your stunning work has been featured here untamedunwanted.deviantart.com…! :heart:
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AbbyMeyer Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2013
This is so awesome! I love Greek mythology and think you've really done Persephone justice. :)
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you <3
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DarkLover33 Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2013   Writer
Love it!
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
glad to hear so :)
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mythicamagic Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Hades and Persephone were always my fav Greek OTP! This poem was beautiful, well done! 
Have u seen this Deviantarts work? Her Hades x Persephone fan work is ah mazing:www.deviantart.com/art/MYth-De…

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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Yes and I cry because I want that talent ;_;
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mythicamagic Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Same here :'( xxx
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DarkLord75253 Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2013
:devart::iconbigheartplz::devart:
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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Mrs-SaxoBeat Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
A sincere and beautiful tribute to The Goddess <3
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :heart:
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LunaStarFighter Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2013
The story of Hades and Persephone has always been my favorite out of all the mythological tales. I'm glad I'm not alone in my love for this God and Goddess.
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
They are the best.
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hallosse Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2013  Student General Artist
' sweet
harvest among
the wretched.'  Beautiful! 
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you <3
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hallosse Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2013  Student General Artist
Mm-hm.  I don't usually go for free verse, but this is very good. 
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EternityRivers Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Okay when the page loaded and I saw the first words of this I had just bitten into a pomegranate.  

Twilight zone music plays in the background.
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
...that is kinda creepy :XD:
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FierySpark Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
umm
is that safe :?
You do know you're supposed to eat the seeds, right? XD
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EternityRivers Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Don't worry, I opened it before I bit in XD
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FierySpark Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
hahaha alright then XD
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sassycat500 Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2013  Student General Artist

My favorite goddess is Persephone too!!

Your writing is seriously amazing. I wrote a thing for Persephone to, but it wasn't anything like this.

 

 

I am going to post a short story about Hades kidnapping Persephone in like 2 seconds, please check it out

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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much!
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Starstoryteller Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2013
 with every 
breath she takes,
winter cries out
for redemption. Oh Gosh this is so romantic and moving. 
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you <3 glad you caught the romantic bits I tried putting!
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chancerox Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
BAHAHAHAHAH MY MYTHOLOGICAL OTP awesfdsdf i love it so much 

damn girl, if this is writer's block, what isn't? you are so talented. 
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
ME TOO

OTP


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Aqureshi1 Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2013
Yay! Persephone and Hades FTW!
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
aw yis
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Decadent-Dreamer Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2013  Student Writer
This was a truly gorgeous piece! I'm struck somewhere between awe and envy trying to review this... The story of Hades and Persephone has always been dear to me. At times, they serve as muses and patrons to my creative self as well, so reading this struck me somewhere deep and aching. I'm a little in love with your word--to be honest! Thanks so much for sharing this with us!!
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Ahhh, thank you so much! That means a lot to me! :blush: Hades and Persephone are the best.
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ssensory Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2013   Writer
god damn this is beautiful.

writer's block baby? this one is gorgeous. you are an amazing poet. you can turn your writer's block into something wonderful...that's a talent in itself.
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
no shush

<3
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Well, that was absolutely wonderful. :heart: Melpomene is my choice muse (being a muse herself.) I am sort of amazed by how wonderful your poetry is, sometimes.
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
all the Greek things are my muse

Thank you <3
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insomniaplague Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Honesty is the best policy! :D No need for thanks.
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TheCreativeUserName Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wowl! The language is beautiful, very well done 
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :heart:
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oh1994 Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2013
Wish I could come out of writers block with something as awe inspiring!
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Trust me; this was a surprise to me!
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IcyKitsuneStorm Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
So very nice! I love it!
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thanks <3
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IcyKitsuneStorm Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome :)
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