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personally,
i can’t see myself with
the milky way embedded in my
bones, much less my heart. it
sure would be nice to wish upon a
star for our happy ending, but i think
my prince charming just
sees through
me.

i am a phantom
with wanderlust
stitched into my
lips and rose petals
inked into my skin.

these galaxy-fearing
bones would like to
whisper “i love you”
in every language of
the world,
because fate may
not exist and it’s
high time i form
my own destiny.
A poem from my secret series, one that turned out halfway decent and I really liked how it came out. So I'm sharing it on here. I made a positive poem for once guys! Woohoo for me!

The secret: "I hope love doesn’t need fate or destiny, or else I’m screwed, and he’ll never notice."

More secrets here: midnightcrocuses.tumblr.com/

Main blog here: frostbitten-irises.tumblr.com/
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
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That last stanza was the best damn thing I've ever read. In all honesty, it was the most sincere and honest part of this whole poem.

I love the font chosen, and the concreteness of each stanza made it worthwhile in reading. I love the ambience in each and every single proceeding.

I found nothing to particularly pinpoint and fix in this poem. I honestly loved it as is. Well written.
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Pauper-Circumstance Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2013
Hello! :wave: I've used your title here: pauper-circumstance.deviantart… All the credit goes to you. If you have any problem with my use of your title, let me know and I will take it down if you want me to. Thank you! :)
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fox-ninja97 Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2013  Student Writer
This made me think of a story I read recently (Faberry fanfiction, what can ya do?). I think there's fates that we're born to and fates that we make through sheer force of will. I like to think that love is one that we create :)

I really liked this, by the way. The imagery is beautiful and touches that part of my heart that'll have me sighing for half the night over it.
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akkajess Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2013  Student Writer
Hi!
Your amazing work has been featured here: akkajess.deviantart.com/journa…
:heart:
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I really like this. I mean, REALLY like this. :heart:
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm glad to hear so!
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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chancerox Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
gahh. that secret is just like me what can i have a pickle please. 
breathtaking work as usual. 
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!

my friends call me Princess Anti-Pickle because I hate them so much lol
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chancerox Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
.. that is flawless 
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stargirl2791 Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
excellent imagery!
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! <3
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stargirl2791 Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
welcome! :)
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gnocchini2000 Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Wow. Amazing!!
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :heart:
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gnocchini2000 Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Welcome!
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JessenoSabaku Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
This reminds me of one of my good friends. Very self-driven, and looking for acceptance and love all over the world through comic book writing.
I like to think fate is more tangible than it seems, and doesn't branch down just one path. It doesn't matter how we reach our ends as long as we get there, and our ends can have the same weight but different happenings.
Anyway, what I mean to say is, this poem is very thought-inspiring.
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I hope so. I'd like to meet my fate head-on and then wrestle it into something that I make it into.

Thank you. <3
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LayaAmaranthi Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Why must they always be so amazing ... I'm jelly. I've been practicing shorter poetry. I've always loved this style, yours especially. 
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
They're not ^^; But thank you - I really do like this one because of the way I managed to make it positive.
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LayaAmaranthi Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:)
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Sometimesyousuck123 Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013  Student General Artist
I really like it a lot. I really do. 
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm glad to hear so. <3
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Sometimesyousuck123 Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013  Student General Artist
XD 
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