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At one point in your life,
you didn't mind being a girl.

It was only after you met
her that you thought, "Maybe
this isn't the right fit." Because,
if you're being honest, she
deserves a knight in shining armor.

You are not Atlas, my dear.

Your shoulders do not
merit a world of troubles,
but instead love-lined clouds
that whisper, "Do not be
ashamed of who you are."

A woman can be a
champion whose heart burns
with more gold than a king's
castle holds. Perhaps if
you had more faith,
you might find that's just what
she needs.
A poem from my secret series, which I finally got around to writing again. I really like this one. It turned out positive, which is good, and I just got all fuzzy from it. I hope the secret holder sees this and I also hope that others in this position can figure things out. I'm rooting for you guys, okay? :)

The secret: "I hope she finds someone who thinks the world of her the way I do…just in guy form. She deserves that."

More secrets here: midnightcrocuses.tumblr.com/

Main blog here: frostbitten-irises.tumblr.com/
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LilyHellsing Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2014
Baaaw! Gah, this is amazingly sweet.
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BunnyFitzgerald Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2013
So sweet, I hope she finds this too. It's sure to make her month :)
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TwistedWillows Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2013
Beautifully written and a message well-said. :3
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StrikeTheMadness Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2013  Professional Writer

I wanted to let you know that I used this poems title as a part of a title poem I recently wrote and posted on here. I of course gave you credit and provided a link to your poem on the poems page in hopes to help spread your work. Feel free to check out the poem here: strikethemadness.deviantart.co…

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kittykatrocks12 Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I LOVE THIS!!!!!!!
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ManiacTenshi Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2013  Student General Artist
Beautiful and positive. We need more of this.
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projectofir Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2013  Professional Writer
I know the poem writer's intentions are well, but I would find this offensive if I was the receiver. Feelings, especially love, are always a battleground for two people to fit in, and no more. Writer seems to assume it's alright to chime in and assume things out of someone else's head.
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kushamisaru Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hi! I'm the receiver :)

I totally respect the way you would feel, because those are your feelings and you have every right to them. But I'd like to reiterate that I did really like this. I'm still riding the high it gave me. Also, the way the secret series works is you come to a writer with your secret and they make a poem out of it. So she's not intruding, I came to her and let her in.

*rolls away*
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It all depends how you interpret it. The secret holder personally approached me saying she couldn't have been happier with the poem because of the confidence it gave her.
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projectofir Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2013  Professional Writer
Yes, interpretations vary as in all art. And that's the way it should be. However, my opinion being said, I salute you for taking a stand on this hard subject. And if I, for some brainfarting reason, have missed the political message in this and it indeed holds one - then, then I might swallow my tongue and join the cheering people.
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BlueDiamondSnow Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I would love to know the story behind this. Beautifully written and delightfully hopeful. 
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :heart:
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SolarLugia Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is so simple and wonderfully sweet in it's message! Which also is the reason it's so powerful~ Thanks for Posting! :>
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:iconlupus-astra:
lupus-astra Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you <3
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chancerox Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
i really do love this a lot. 
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:iconlupus-astra:
lupus-astra Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm glad to hear so :)
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HumanScolopendra Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I am ftm, and I somewhat identify.
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:hug:
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Story-of-a-Mind Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is beautiful! The line that I liked the most was You are not Atlas, my dear.
It fits my (totally different) situation as well.
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you <3
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Whetsit-Tuya Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Student Filmographer
This story so speaks to me, I like to pour soy sauce on my asian girlfriend's carpet jk :iconthatswasisplz:
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
that's awful :XD:
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TerminalGlow Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I love this entire poem. I've never really had much interest in love myself, but the more I think about it the more I find myself saying "If I were to be in a relationship with someone, I would want that someone to be a girl." I would want a "fellow knight", someone who would lift my spirits and let me lift theirs. No one seems to think that I swing that way, though.

I would very much like to say that the secret submitter just give herself the chance. There's always the possibility that the one she likes isn't as out-of-reach as she thinks.
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kushamisaru Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Heya! That'd be me :meow:

Are you prepared for some lame excuses? Because you're gonna hear/read some:

I've had a crush on at least one person every year since the 1st grade. None of them were returned until my Junior year. So... I kind of have a huge fear of rejection. 

I've become more confident in myself and my looks since then, but for the first time the odds are almost for sure against me. For the first time, I don't feel like it's a 50-50 shot. And honestly she's so great I don't wanna risk losing her at all.

Oh, I'm also bollocks at relationships anyway, so I'm taking time to myself to become less... clingy, and less accepting of the shit people give me. 

On a much brighter note though, this did give me some confidence. I'm motivated more to write and honestly before this I didn't have any hope for myself and her. So yes, it did help.

It's just issues
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much. That's my view on life too - just finding someone who can make me happy and vice versa. I've never gotten into romantic relationship yet.

I think the secret submitter is already feeling better. :)
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SHERBUT Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
I love how you have basically explain my life...
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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ApprovingAbnormality Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I don't know what this is, but it's actually very nice!
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It's a poem.
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ApprovingAbnormality Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
A good poem.
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SeriesArtiststarter Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I can truly not make heads nor tails of this, here is something sweet to it but it's kind of Ohhh.
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'll respect your opinion.
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SeriesArtiststarter Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
^^" Pardon my ignorance but this refers to a Girl on Girl Relationship yes? I believe it's truly a piece of textual art that displays something that would make one think many a time and portray the idea that there are people out there who are strong for others
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PrinceCiel Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013
Okay. :/
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Meh
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fox64664 Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
im a fox :D
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer







what does the fox say
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fox64664 Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
moo
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XocoWilde Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013   Digital Artist
This is beautiful TT u TT it reflect how I felt with a girl too, the good thing now she is my cutie pie =w= hehe
You indeed knew how to put that feeling on the poem, is indeed so nice :heart: BEAUTIFUL! Thanks for share it with us.
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm glad it worked out for you!
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Blackheart546 Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
There's only one way to explain something like this.... PERFECT. It's so beautiful, so stunning, it reminds me of how wonderful things can be. It makes me happy that someone can still be amazing and write amazing poetry, and know exactly how to word it, and how to make people feel good just from reading it. 
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Ahaha, thank you so much!
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Blackheart546 Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome! It's super cute! 
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DreamPuppeteer Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Beautiful. Utterly beautiful. People deserve to love who they want.
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
They do indeed.
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Hazelnut-Eyes Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm a sucker for gorgeous poetry and THIS....Perfect.
It's beautifully worded with a lovely use of symbolic imagery...Love it.

I believe that you should be who you are inside and not hide who you long to be, simply because 'society' does not agree with it. Go out there, find your purpose in life and follow it 
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
asdfg thank you so much <3
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Hazelnut-Eyes Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Welcomes :'3
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InvaderRosIrken Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is beautiful, and I can totally relate to this. I think many girls who love another girl feel they aren't good enough because society has always pounded it into our heads that a woman should be with a man. That however is not always true. Some men need to be with other men, and some women need to be with other women. That's just the fact of the matter. Love is love no matter how you express it am people are people regardless. 
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battlebrothertherix Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Looks like I'm not the only one who shares this view.

Guy with a guy, girl with a girl, guy with a girl, whatever.
I'm a guy and I have a girlfriend, that's just me. I know guys who have boyfriends and girls who have girlfriends and I'm as good a friend with them as I am with anyone else. My only rule like that is that people leave me to my own sexuality and I leave them to theirs.
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