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I have lost myself to
Venus & Mars,
tangled in their mismatched limbs.

Just dream dust & shattered prayers
begging for a new set of skin
(she can't remember where she orbits).

Pluck these fractured wings;
the Sun & Moon no longer ache
to see me fly in their luster.
Extremely personal.

I feel stuck in my skin right now but I'm going to try and work it out.

Just had to write this as a little venting thing.
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kakashifiend Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2015
Oh goodness I want so badly to understand what this poem is talking about because it sounds so beautiful <3 but I just can't seem to pin my head around it TT
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HiddenShadowSpirit Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow.
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Itsuko97 Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013  Student Artist
Your venting is beautiful.
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kushamisaru Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
ONCE AGAIN, I'm stuck trying to interpret. You're just way above my head, y'know that?

But if I do understand... I must compliment you on your clever choice of words and the immediate imagery it brings. I also hope you're feeling better now :)

Actually. Those things remain regardless of whether I understand or not.
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CaptainQuirk Featured By Owner May 28, 2013
:)
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0-EmoLeopard-0 Featured By Owner May 26, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is incredible; I love the wording and the spacing and the use of punctuation and just everythig god you're my favourite poet ever jahcllaxasgd i should study your stuff in class

Are you ok? You can note me if you want - I'll listen.
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner May 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm fine...I think.
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0-EmoLeopard-0 Featured By Owner May 27, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Ok C:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner May 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
you're so beautiful :heart:
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner May 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
ehe...
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OurBraveHeroine Featured By Owner May 20, 2013   Writer
This is really amazing, I can't stop reading it :) every word is beautiful.
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner May 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much.
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OurBraveHeroine Featured By Owner May 21, 2013   Writer
You're welcome :)
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ktkeiper Featured By Owner May 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm sorry if you're gonna get mad about this, but you have a double negative in the second line of the last stanza...
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner May 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I forgot to edit it out because I uploaded it when I was in a hurry; thanks, I just edited it to make it flow better. Why would I get mad? I take all criticism.
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ktkeiper Featured By Owner May 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Some people get angry when you tell them things like that, and I haven't done that to you before, so I didn't know what to expect. That's all :)
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Fall-Like-Angels Featured By Owner May 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I totally get ya. And...beautiful as always.
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner May 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks.
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findmyface Featured By Owner May 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Being trapped in your own world. I feel you bro.
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner May 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Ugh...yeah.
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ramblingoldhermit Featured By Owner May 18, 2013
Seems ironic. I like it though.
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner May 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Ironic is exactly what it is in real life.
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kiku----honda Featured By Owner May 18, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Brilliant, dark, mysterious, alluring... I can put down a bucket full of adjectives that describe the mood in this lovely poem! Fantastic job!
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner May 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much.
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