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i.
Dreams will slowly fade
as dawn breaks through the windows;
morning’s here again.

ii.
Stomachs growl and groan
as smells from the kitchen waft;
afternoon is here.

iii.
Dusk paints a red sky,
the sun retires for the night;
evening shall bring peace.

iv.
The stars and moon dance,
a waltz of shining passion;
night has come at last.
Just a dumb little haiku series I wrote for creative writing. I figured I'd upload it here to prove to everyone how much I suck at haikus. :| And tankas. I can't write those either.

But creative writing really is a fantastic class for me, since I'm given so many different ways to write as an outlet.

I can't wait until the prose unit. Then maybe I'll actually get around to actual stories instead of fanfictions.
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kushamisaru Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm very sad that you don't seem to like this. This is actually one of my favorite pieces by you! You pulled together lovely, relatable imagery using so few words; it's almost like you're giving the middle finger to the form that is haiku. Like you're saying "Trick, please. I'm not scared of you."

And I'm sitting here like, "HOW DOES SHE DO IT?"
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sherlock-status Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013  Student Writer
I've always hated haikus... They are the bane of my existence...
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Me too. :|
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imagination-junkie Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013
These are fun :D

I like the first and third one the best.
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I like the last one the best. All the others are dumb. :|
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CrazyCharlette1415 Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Nice haiku series! :dance: Very thoughtful! I'm pretty sure most of us (if not all) can relate to the third haiku. ^^
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I thought it was dumb D:
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tommyboywood Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Not dumb at all, rather nice
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Aha, thanks.
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Espada-Kitsuki Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
... wonderful! I love this piece!

Haiku, huh? ... I can never write haiku. I just write in prose.

So I applaud you even more! :iconepicclapplz:
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It's so baaaad though. You should see other pieces by people. Good lord they have talent. I'm a wannabe.
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Espada-Kitsuki Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
No, you're not a wannabe. You just have a little more to learn :)
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forxa Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013
It's nice.
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
No it's not it sucks. :|
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forxa Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013
;u; okay.
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epicbleachfan998 Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
It's not a dumb little haiku! D: You're an awesome writer! I've never been able to write one though... ^^;

I like the sound of your creative writing class. It's pretty awesome. :D
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Yes it is. It sucks. :|

I like it a lot. The teacher is fantastic--classmates? Not so much, but I'll live with it.
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Svitavotara Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013
You're fantastic at it!
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lupus-astra Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Aha, thanks...
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Svitavotara Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2013
No problem.
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